Lucy Balian
Professor Broadous
PAS 113B
Limited Space
Each individual admires their space differently,
depending on how much they have or lost. If a person were to have their
necessities taken away, their space would chance completely. They would have an
altered opinion as to what is valuable and mandatory to survive. People usually
define space by where someone lives, wears, eats, and likes. All these factors
can be found in a person’s home. However, if a person loses their home because
they cannot afford it, than they no longer have their space. Families have been
corrupted due to the recession, and the poverty rate is increasing every day.
Because homelessness is becoming more common, people are separated from the
space that was once so comforting, stable, secure, and reassuring. People now
have to settle in motels, relative’s homes, or even cars. Poverty is rising and
children are being affected, education is not as accessible to those in
poverty, and health is becoming difficult to manage. Poverty affects
individuals and families psychologically, economically, and socially.
The U.S has 150 million in poverty, and that number is
only rising, (Smiley). Millions of houses have been foreclosed because families
can no longer afford them. “As property values have plummeted, many homeowners
find their mortgages ‘under water’-they owe more on their mortgage than their
house is worth” (U.S Social and Economic Trends). Because of the decrease in
job demands, people cannot work to make money to pay for a house. More people
are moving in with family members to save money, because the other alternative
would be living in a shelter or getting money illegally. This can corrupt ones
space because they do not have privacy and time to themselves. I decided to
volunteer at a homeless shelter, and the space in which the homeless people could
stay was limited. There was a certain amount of apartments that the families
and individuals could stay in. These people had about 6 months to live in these
homes until they got themselves a job. Furthermore, there had to be certain
requirements in order to live in the shelter. The shelter was not an option for
those who could not meet the specific requirements. Children are affected the
most because they lose charisma and grow to be distant. Donations are given to
the homeless people, and often time these donations are torn up clothes, broken
kitchen utensils, canned food, or dirty toys for children to play with.
Children feel embarrassed towards their friends about their living
circumstances, so they do not socialize as often. It is crucial for a person to
have a social life to grow up properly. One boy relates to being distant and
not social. He explains how people would complain about the way he’d talk too
often. However, when he became homeless, he said opinions have changed, and
people are now asking why he is so quiet and “to himself” (60 Minutes). His
personal belongings were taken away from him, and he was left with nothing,
which is an example of how space defines a person. This lifestyle and behavior
of children is becoming common to families and individuals across the United
States, as poverty is rising and becoming more of an issue.
Those in poverty have less access to education, than
people in the middle and high class population. Many children in poverty do not
focus in education, because they are trying to find jobs to help pay for
necessities to survive. School is a space for children and teenagers to develop
knowledge and experiences, but because of low income, that space is no longer
apart of the lives of many children and young adults. In school, children are
taught to read, write, solve equations, and exercise their logic. Now that
school isn’t part of their daily lifestyle, the basic reading level has
decreased. Children struggle in reading and learning because they do not have
the proper resources to be taught. “There are young mothers and fathers whose
literacy skills must be improved to prevent their children from relieving their
own cycle of low skills and low wages. There are teenage mothers who are ill
prepared to face a demanding work force” (Cummings). Because their parents have
lower than basic reading skills as well, there is no way the parents can help
with improving the children’s reading skills. Children are not educated, and our
next generation will suffer because of it. Those in poverty have a higher
drop-out rate than the upper class. “Studies show that children’s performance
in school directly correlates to the income of their families. We have 1.8
million children living in poverty in Florida. That children in poverty don’t
perform well starts with the fact 67 million don’t have any access to
education” (Schatz). The public schools that low income children attend do not
provide a good source of education. There are music teachers who have to teach
math classes, and even P.E teachers who have to teach academic courses as well.
In the shelter I volunteered in, the establishment urged the children and
teenagers to learn and go to school. The place even provided tutors to help the
children with reading and math. The teens had a variety of books to read.
Sadly, most shelters cannot afford resources like this. One boy claims that he
had to drop of high school in his senior year because he had to find a job to
help his family financially. His parents lost their jobs, and also lost their
homes because they could not afford to pay off the debts and bills. They were
temporarily living in their van, than moving in multiple motels. He said that
education was not a concern, but survival was more important because of the
situation his family was in (60 Minutes).
Health is difficult to manage when living an impoverished
life style. Many people with low income do not have the money to spend on
healthy food, because healthy food is more expensive. Instead, they eat what
people donate. Often times in shelters, people donate canned foods which
contain starch and artificial chemicals. This is unhealthy for one’s body, and
can later turn to something far more serious. “In the United States low income
immigrant groups experience greater health disparities and worse health-related
outcomes than whites, including but not limited to higher rates of type 2
diabetes (T2DM)” (Chaufan). Fortunately, the homeless people I saw in the
shelter were provided with 3 healthy meals a day. This was a way for them to
save any money they can get, and not have to worry about spending on food which
would be an extra expense. This factor interferes with the space of those in
poverty, because the people, who have once had jobs to pay for decent food, now
have to cope with eating food that is unsatisfying with no nutritional value.
It has even gotten to the point where families had to go nights sleeping on an
empty stomach. Impoverished children who attend school cannot even focus in
their classes because of malnutrition, and they have no energy to complete
school work. Living in poverty often times affects ones healthy psychologically
too. People who complete their education and earn a degree are more likely to
get married than those who do not.
The voice and tone is good, as you descibed the environment of the families and children in poverty. Your essay flows. Audience is clearly the reader as I could understand along. The meaning is good, as you stated 3 main points for how poverty affects families.
ReplyDeleteEvidence is okay, you could maybe add some more background info. on the first introduction paragraph. Nice use of quotes throughout the essay to support points.
For structure, maybe you should split a paragraph to make it a total of 5.
For organization, you should conclude with final paragraph of the possible solutions like how programs and shelters can help the poverty, but still not solve it.